Wednesday, October 6, 2010

Horror Scene Comes Alive!

Nina Cortez, a bookkeeper at the North Point Inn, experienced a horror scene, come alive.

About 9 A.M yesterday, money was stolen and a man was killed. Nina Cortez and Kevin Blohm, one of the cooks, who had come in to work had not suspected anything except a strange car in the parking lot.

Blohm, after making coffee for Cortez, walked back down the corridor and Cortez had begun going through the receipts and cash from the previous night.

She described, “A minute or so after I began counting, a man came around the corner, carrying a knife. I started screaming and kicking. My chair was on rollers, and when I started kicking, it fell. I fell on the floor, and he reached across my desk and grabbed $130 in $5 bills.” Moments before police arrived, the man walked out.

Cortez and police walked out into the hallway and discovered Blohms dead body. “It was awful,” Cortez expressed, “There was blood on the walls and floor. Kevin was lying on the floor, dead. He had a large knife wound in his chest and another on one hand.”

No other information was given. Further investigation is to be done. 

4 comments:

  1. nice work! I really enjoyed your story! Ur lead was catchy! I just read one on the same thing before this one and its fun to see the different aspects people take to writing a story.

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  2. Really nice job putting this story together, I wrote mine on the same one and it looks quite different! Good use of quotations :)

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  3. From the lead line I expected it to be more gruesome. I'm glad it wasn't, I don't think I could have handled that while I'm home alone.

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  4. Good job! I think you did a good combination of telling the story and using quotations. It was easy to read and flowed pretty well.

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